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Just posted "The Lover". It was so difficult to write. I don't know if it sounds realistic, or if it was over too soon, or not described in enough detail.
I felt so silly writing it, too!
And, as usual, I ended up being more excited about the plot possibilities and character development than anything else. ^^;;
Any CC to give me on my first smut-writing?
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Speaking of, I started up a pairings thread.
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Hey, Anna, don't let me forget to take time at home and give you a good concrit on this. Short version, though, is that I have trouble believing this is your first time! Very well done, very hot!
Lyn, who likes shoelaces.
http://Addergoole.com "Teen angst and growing up in this gripping dark fantasy novel" -
It helps to write what you know, I guess. :P
Anna - blushing.
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Just posted the follow-up to The Lover, called Stolen Moments. Exact same timeline, following what Vera and Al get up to after Jake and Rae leave.
Not sure about the ending... wondering whether it was too sudden?
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whooooooooo wow that one was well written... as for the ending *thinks* Well more response from her after would be better but this is from Als' point of view so ... ya makes sense, most guys pop then roll over and go to sleep
Puddles = Insanity... Watch them... watch them CAREFULLY... they move... they move by themselves!!!! -
Yay! I liked it. The ending is a bit fast, but it's fine. It must be mating season or something. =) (does that deserve a happy face?) I think it does. =) =) Two happy faces.
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Thanks - I'm glad you guys liked it!
Yeah the ending was fast. I had tried to add in more reactions from Vera, her snuggling up to him, or saying something, but I just felt like Al... well he's a guy. He'd just sleep or something.
I think that was the tricky bit for me. Writing from a guy's perspective, when I clearly have no idea what they think during sex!
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I thought you did a very good guy's perspective, but, then again, I don't know what goes on in their minds during sex, either.
But it sounded believable
~L
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Glad you think so. Felt so silly writing it, again.
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I know the "felt silly writing it" thing! I keep thinking about something I read - that most m/m slash is written by teenaged girls and is highly unrealistic... and I wonder if that's what I'm doing.
Um. Your stuff sounded spot on with things guys have told me. If that helps?
~L
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Ha. Yes, it helps. Thanks. :)
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Good! *hug?*
Lyn
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why hug with a question mark?
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