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chapter 20

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  1. amharte

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    Posted 9 months ago #

    Not much happens, but I oddly had fun with this chapter.

    The scene transition at the end is a little sudden but I couldn't think of a smooth way to just jump forward, and thought it would be boring to keep describing the blood-letting

    Thoughts?

  2. Lyn Thorne-Alder

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    Posted 9 months ago #

    I like the way Amber deals with the non-weres. I have, of course, many many questions. I also like Lilith's cultural wealth assumptions - nice touch!

    ~Lyn

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  3. amharte

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    Posted 9 months ago #

    I'm glad - I have been trying to include more of Lilith's cultural-ness in the story, to flesh her out a little. It's good you notice. :)

  4. Lyn Thorne-Alder

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    Posted 9 months ago #

    That's what I'm for. I think it helps remind us that she's from a totally different culture.

    ~L


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