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chapter 17

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  1. amharte

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    Posted 10 months ago #

    Um. A lot of talking. I know. I ended up having to cut it early (I was planning on ending the chapter with Lilith's arrival in town, but noooooo they needed to chat about Rae and Silver needed to have his freak out).

    I wanted to show Lilith's growing inner inconsistencies. She can't help but think of the others as people, yet in her mind she's trying to convince herself they're not. She doesn't want to relate to them... In the darkest corner of her mind she's wondering what it'd be like if she was stuck above ground forever, and the thought terrifies her.

    And so she's acting out a little. Kind of stupidly, but there you go.

  2. Lyn Thorne-Alder

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    Posted 10 months ago #

    I liked this. It was really well-done, giving us a look into Lilith's mind. Well done!

    Lyn

    http://Addergoole.com "Teen angst and growing up in this gripping dark fantasy novel"
  3. amharte

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    Joined: Sep '09
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    Posted 10 months ago #

    Aww thanks! I'm doing my best.

    I guess I was just worried because I had planned to include more action, but the damn characters kept talking and talking and talking!


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