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chapter 15
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This chapter was really tough for me.
I dislike the initial scene; I think it's a little confusing with so many characters. Did my best to make things clear, but still think it could be better. It was tough, because Lilith has to witness it all but is not allowed to participate, and I like writing from the thick of things, not the outskirts.
Then there's the jump forward in time. Lilith gets very emotional and moody. I can see why some of you may find that annoying, but I think it was about time: this is the first lull, without her worrying about being killed in the immediate future.
I really like the backstory, the parents. I have a soft spot for angsty writing, I suppose, but I hope that you found those scenes moving as well.
But, yes, this chapter does rollercoaster around with emotions, so apologies if you found that annoying!
Thoughts and comments are, as always, greatly appreciated.
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Aww! Silver is being almost nice!
It's early for me, and this story deserves better commentary then that (I still owe you concrit on something else, too!) I'll be back later
!Lny
http://Addergoole.com "Teen angst and growing up in this gripping dark fantasy novel" -
Look forward to your crit. :)
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Poke me with a stick until I do this, please. I need regular poking to remember such things.
L
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POKE.
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